My grandmother and I have a secret, you can't tell anybody, swear on your life? We are robbers, we have robbed all over the world, we mostly rob for jewels. I have to go were about to steal some more jewels, I think we’re stealing from the Jewel shop across the road from the dairy. We stole a huge blue sapphire, on no! I think I heard some police sirens coming down our street, “come on we have to go!” said my grandmother “but where should we hide it all?” I asked back “it doesn't matter let's go!!” so my grandmother and I set off nowhere to be found.
Tuesday 14 November 2017
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Hey, you should read ‘Gangsta Granny’ by David Walliams. It’s similar to your story. Don’t forget to edit!
ReplyDeleteSteven Hales - Norfolk, England- Team100wc
Nice story Poppy! I like how you hooked us in with a question.
ReplyDeleteRemember to check your word make sense e.g Jewelry instead of Jewel.