Monday 20 November 2017

Lui 100wc T4 W6


There once lived a demon witch she killed little kids and eat them. These are just a few of the disgusting thing she liked to do in her free time. She used to have a good friend that was called Julie but she mistaken her for a little kid and killed her. This is why she is so crazy. Her name is Karen and everyone calls her crazy Caren in the town. So to make herself feel better she goes to Juliet's grave every day and prays to her saying how sorry she is and how much she misses her.

3 comments:

  1. Nice story Lui interesting story line. Just remember to go through after to check if it makes sense.

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  2. I really liked your story lui. It had good descriptive words and punctuation.
    Next time make sure that it makes sense for example- she killed little kids and eat them -
    It should be- she killed little kids and then ate then.

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  3. I really liked your story! I especially liked the storyline and the way you used descriptive words to make a good story. Maybe next time remember to read through your story carefully to make sure it makes sense for example- she killed little kids and eat them for it to make sense you could put- she killed little kids and then ate them.


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