On the spooky night of halloween everyone is dressed up in frightening costumes. Me and my best friends got so much candy that after we filled up all our bags we had to put candy in our costumes. When our costumes were full we decided to go home and eat all our candy. But on the way home we had to go through a park that people said was haunted. We were walking through and we saw a figure that looked like a grim reaper. He said in his frightening voice “see you in hell’ then turned into a statue.
Tuesday 21 November 2017
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Nice story James good suspense in the story, just remember to read through to make sure it makes sense.
ReplyDeleteGreat story James, I really like how it ended.
ReplyDeleteNext time make sure that it all makes sense.
I really liked your story! I especially liked the ending. Next time make sure it makes sense.
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