Tuesday 7 November 2017

Izzy 100WC T4W4


I glance across to my right to see a person, not a normal person. I gasp, a ghost in my own town? Could anyone else see this peculiar figure looming around the streets of London. He stared me down, am I targeted for some reasons? The mysterious human came floating towards me, a deaf grin splattered over his face. This must be in my head, an illusion, it must be. Nobody is noticing me getting cornered by this creature. Now I see, not just one person was narrowing me down, and not just one was translucent either, in fact all.

1 comment:

  1. I really liked your story especially how it ended.
    Next time make sure to use grammar.

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