Monday 27 November 2017

Bradley 100WC W7T4

I just finished making my bacon, meatball and cheese sandwich when - a white energetic battery mascot burst through my wall and yelled: “GET YOUR BATTERIES TODAY!” Then he left. I was so sad because the debris had crushed my sandwich so I now I have to make a new one. So I hurried outside to get bacon, meatballs, cheese. When I came back I saw that my wall was fixed. Now I don’t have to pay for the damage. I walk through the door to find the stupid mascot in my house eating my sandwich! Then he gave me batteries.
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5 comments:

  1. Anonymous28 November 2017 at 15:46

    I really liked your story! I especially liked the storyline and the way you thought outside of the box to make a good story.

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  2. Anonymous28 November 2017 at 20:22

    Nice work! I liked how you had speech in your story. Next time maybe make your story line easier to follow.

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  3. Anonymous28 November 2017 at 20:54

    Good Story!, I liked how you had some humor in your story. Maybe next time try to make it more interesting by trying to make it make more sense. I was a bit confused in the middle of what was happening. But other than that good job.
    Natasha

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  4. Anonymous1 December 2017 at 22:39

    Great story Bradley! but maybe next time make your sentences make sense.

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  5. WlazlosWonders3 December 2017 at 13:36

    Hi Bradley,
    What an interesting take on the words this week! Very unique. I think you did a great job!
    Mrs. Wlazlo in NY
    Team 100

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