Monday 6 November 2017
Bradley 100WC T4W4
I live in a ghost town, by that I don’t mean there’s hardly anyone living here- this place is HAUNTED. The museum has ghosts and the tomb of a mummy is creepy. The other day was life day. I went to the museum and the mummy was alive. You can’t tell me that my hometown isn’t haunted, because it clearly is. Swarming ghosts shaking mummy’s this place I call home is truly haunted to the bone. The other day my sister woke up with a skeleton under her bed and screamed like a howler monkey! Which is very very annoying.
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I liked your spooky story!
ReplyDeleteNext time maybe you could make sure that your sentences make sense like: Swarming ghosts shaking mummy's, doesn't make sense.
I really liked your story and your descriptive words.
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you made some of it rhyme.