Ahhh, I said as I woke up to the barely smoking campfire. I packed up my tent and put my bag comfortably on my back. The tall trees cast big shadows on the dirt ground. I could hear the loud birds chirp on the top of the pine trees, I had spent hours walking and the sky was slowly going dark. Just as I was looking for a place to tent, I could see smoke just a couple of meters away. I went over to find men in dark coats. Just as I heard sound behind me, it went black.
Wednesday 22 November 2017
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Well done Benji, I liked your story. Just remember to use proper punctuation next time.
ReplyDeleteI really liked your story! I especially liked how you thought outside of the box to think of a great story line. Well done :)
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