I was shopping with my friends last night and I was enjoying it until I saw a bunch of peaceful ghost. I was screaming but nobody else noticed the ghosts. Everybody was just staring at me screaming intensely. A few seconds later I couldn't see the ghosts but someone else would see the ghosts and then they wouldn't see the ghost anymore then someone else would see the ghosts. All the ghost looked the humans from all ages. We decided to ignore the ghosts if we saw them. After that night no more ghost were found in that area again.
Wednesday 8 November 2017
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I liked your storyline idea.
ReplyDeleteNext time maybe you can make sure that your story makes sense like: a bunch of peaceful ghost.