Meadow lane is a very tight community with three different farms on it. There’s the Smiths, the Potters and of course old farmer Joe. He is the craziest kindest and friendliest person you would ever meet. Joe owns a small farm at the back of lane that he once shared with his beloved wife Joanne who sadly died a few years ago. He always has picnics on his farm for all the kids on the lane. But one day when whilst having a picnic with the Smith kids he tripped over a twig and fell into the pond head first!
I really liked the end because it persuades me into it reading more and more
ReplyDeleteI liked how you used words like beloved and tight community.
ReplyDeleteNext time maybe think about putting commas in between a series
of describing word like craziest, kindest and friendliest.
I really liked this story it had a great story line. I think that next time you should put some more commas in.
ReplyDeleteI liked how your idea was slightly different to everyone else's because that made it more interesting.
ReplyDeleteI loved the vocabulary you used and how you described everything.