One day their was a man called Jim. Jim loved to play in puddles. One day he jumped into a puddle which took him to another dimension. In that dimension he found these two people called Rick so he decided to talk to them to ask them how long have they been there so Rick answered by saying just a year then Jim freaked out thinking he would never get back home. But Rick said they were trying to get back to earth as well so then they decided to put their minds together and that helped them get home.
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