Wednesday, 25 October 2017

Rosie 100wc T4-W2

Bungee Jump


I have never been more terrified, I am walking towards a very high height! I am shivering and my teeth are chattering. Walking towards a door and outside the door the platform where I have to do one of the most rememberable and amazing things of my life. My shaking hand grabs the door and push it open. As the door slammed I knew that there was no going back. Butterflies were an understatement! It was all sort of a blur, but when I lifted my feet of the platform, My worries left me. The best experience of my life

3 comments:

  1. best story I've read in the 100 Word challenge the story just sucked me in it's a really persuasive writing but maybe next time make some of your sentences make sense.

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  2. I really liked how you used the two words chattering and understatement.
    Next time you should make sure that it makes sense for example -- Walking towards a door and outside the door the platform where I have to do one of the most rememberable and amazing things of my life.

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  3. I loved how in your writing you didnt say exactly what you were doing, because that let us infer what it was.(Even though your title is Bungee jump.)
    Double check your punctuation, add a full stop & change a capital to lowercase.
    Overall It was amazing.

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