Sunday, 15 October 2017

Benji W1

The detectors were completely shocked. A body stabbed and left head first in a polluted lake, tied down with a boat anchor.
“Three stabs to the torso, hanging upside-down. Not a single trace of fingerprints or blood or any physical evidence of the suspect, and no definite motive but it is known the victim owed money to a loan-shark” The scene was packed full of police officers and detectives taking notes and calling in specialists.

When the DNA traces came in a man named “Douglas Thomas” was a prime match-up. It was found that he did the murder.

4 comments:

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  2. Really likes your story Benji! I liked the way you write your story about something interesting and hooked the reader in well. Perhaps next time you could use some more descriptive words to explain the scene a little more.

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  3. I liked the way you described the scene, just remember to use different words at the start of sentences.

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  4. I really like the story. Maybe next time you could use some more descriptive words when describing what happened to the person.

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