Thursday, 26 October 2017
Matthew 100Wc T4 Wk2
It was a cold spooky night Halloween was drawing near I had gone out to go buy some decorations for the advent.Once I got the deco I went and brought sweets.then drove home.I got the items and took them inside,But when the door slammed ,I knew that my house had been ransacked.The first thing I did was investigate the place see what was stolen.Then i called the police and they came over as fast as they could they surveyed the border of the house.We found the intruder with a gun in the basement
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I like your story Matthew but maybe next time when you do a full stop put a space then a capital letter because some sentences you are forgetting to use capital letters
ReplyDeleteScary story Matthew, next time remember to put a space after a full stop.
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