Monday, 30 October 2017

Grace Wilson

So mum said she was going out to get dinner and that she would be home soon as. So I went to the kitchen and made myself A ham and cheese sandwich.After that i started my home work and watched my fav show shortland street .10 mins went by then 20 then 30 so on and son on until it was 9 o'clock and she left at 6:30.As I went up stairs to get my to ring Dad i heard aloud bang and crash. As the door slammed i knew i wasn't home alone.

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  1. I really liked the way you told the story in character! Perhaps you could add some more capital I's. also it was pretty hard finding your latest story seeing as though you have 3 tags. xD
    ~Benji :)

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  2. Nice story grace but maybe next time you should use capital I's and after full stops put a space

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  5. I really liked your story line and the way you linked ideas together. Maybe next time you could add more punctuation.

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