The House...
I cautiously crept down the stairs.
As the old wood took my weight I cringed, begging the sound not to give me away. I stopped before the corner. Standing perfectly still, I held my breath, listening for the silence. The coast was clear. I finished making my way to the door, my fingers crossed. There it was gleaming silver, in its lock, the key. The door swings open with ease, although its hinges whined. I stepped outside, the cold air surrounded me like a cloak…. as the door slammed, I knew, I was out and I was never going back.
Nice story, Really liked the way you used suspense and described the scene well. Perhaps next time you could make the story flow a little ore by using more commas and not so many full stops.
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Loved your story. I loved the way you dragged me in I WANT TO READ MORE !!!! Well done
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