Screaming, growling, moody were the only words to describe my mother at this present stage. Her fury was burning a hole in the house and I didn’t know long it would be until she exploded. I didn’t know what I did? I honestly got home and she just started fuming, for no reason. She chased me to my room to talk about my “report”, like know big deal. She just yelled at me with a disappointed look on her face, then walked out in huff, and as the door slammed, I knew this was going to be a long night.
Wednesday, 25 October 2017
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I love your storyline how it could be real. Maybe next time just look over it just in case there are any words missing or there is no commar.
ReplyDeleteI like your story line the first sentence catched my attention.
ReplyDeleteNext time you could add more commas.
I really liked how you hooked me in with a descriptive sentence starter. maybe you should slow down to make sure your sentences make sense.
ReplyDeleteI really liked your story! I especially liked the storyline. Maybe next time you could add more commas and make your sentences make more sense.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the words you put in. But maybe next time check that your sentences make sense.
ReplyDeleteHi Izzy,
ReplyDeleteYour creative way of telling this story is interesting.
Use of descriptives especially at the beginning makes it attractive to your readers.
Thanks for writing.