Monday, 30 October 2017

Madison


I was swimming in my best friends swimming pool. It was only yesterday we had celebrated her 14th birthday. Her birthday party was absolutely amazing, she wore the most beautiful white gown with a sparkly belt. We had her party at the flame concert. It was unlike any other birthday party I had ever been to. The lead singer knew who she was, so we were allowed onto the stage at the end of the concert to get their autographs. I can’t wait for tomorrow to tell all of my other friends all about my great weekend with my friend.

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  1. Anonymous1 November 2017 at 23:02

    Great work! I liked how you used described the scene well about what she wore and how old she was turning. Next time maybe try telling some poeple's names.

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  2. Anonymous15 November 2017 at 20:13

    Good work! I liked how you described the scene.
    Next time make sure that your sentences make sense like: It was only yesterday we had celebrated.

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