Tuesday, 24 October 2017
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My two best friends, Milly and Caitlin, and I were walking to the shop when we stopped at a long driveway, Caitlin said that we should go down but Milly said not to, It was all up to me, should we go down or not? I decided we should go down, when we got to the end of the driveway there was a small but scary house, we went onto the old, creaky veranda, Caitlin knocked on the door but no one answered, so we went in and as the door slammed behind us, I knew we were done for.
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I really like the suspense in the last sentence.
ReplyDeleteNext time maybe you use more full stops like: long driveway. Caitlin said.
I really liked the suspense at the end of your story.
ReplyDeleteMaybe next time you should check your punctuation.
I loved the last sentence, as it gave suspense and i thought it was cool how you used 'we were done for'.
ReplyDeleteTry using some different sentence lengths, to make your writing more intriguing.