There was once an old family that had just bought a new house in texas. One quiet night The parents heard a loud scream that sounded like it came from a female. The next They went for their daily walk to find a large swamp with a girls legs just reaching the surface of the water. The man grabbed a stick and poked the pair of legs. There was no movement so he dropped the stone. As soon as the rock dropped below the water there was a loud scream the same one as the night before the the legs got pulled under the water. After that day no one ever saw that couple ever again.
Monday, 16 October 2017
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Nice horror story I liked how you set the scene in Texas , except Texas needs a capital letter because it is a place.
ReplyDeleteCool story Lui like how it was thrilling, But you put random capital letter in the middle of a sentence.
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