Tuesday 24 October 2017

Ashton 100WC T4 W2

“(Screech!)” I could hear that a car had stopped in my driveway, I didn’t really know what to expect from this deal. He said to me give me your address and i’ll be there, I couldn’t understand why he had to come over.

I heard a knock on the door,I opened the door and three vast men standing there in the doorway over-shadowing me had me a little bit fearful. They mumbled to each other and I couldn’t work out what they were saying. Then they unexpectedly grabbed me and dragged me to their car, threw me inside and as the door slammed I knew I was being taken as hostage by the mexican mafia a gang known for kidnapping and torturing people.


After that it was all too faint to remember.

   

2 comments:

  1. Well done Ashton !! I loved your story !!

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  2. Great story Ashton! I liked the way you used descriptive language like 'vast'. But next time maybe proof read your story before it gets published. For example after a comma is a space and I'll is spelt with a capital I.

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