Wednesday 18 October 2017

100 Work challenge, Ryan

Shoes, we all need them, if we don’t have them we just look like idiots. Now today i’m just going to inform you on some shoe facts. Shoes were invented by the man himself Jan Matzeliger. Jan was born in 1852 , and died in 1889. Now we know who invented them, let’s put some facts out. Men were actually the first people to wear high heels. Women in the United States normally own 19 pairs of shoes. Now that the facts are done, my job is done. I really hope I gave you an insight into the history of shoes.

4 comments:

  1. I like how you had some facts in there and how it was interesting to read. maybe next time add a picture in there to make it more interesting.

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  2. I like how you used real life facts. Maybe next time add some information about the person who is speaking.

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  3. I liked how you added some facts into your story. Next time remember to put the correct title into your writing because this is what you wrote, 100 Work challenge, Ryan.

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  4. I like how you put facts in your story but maybe next time tell the readers where jan Matzeliger was born and where he lives and his life.

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