One day while Hannah was walking around her quaint village she heard something. Something abnormal. Something frightening. The sound was coming from the haunted little shack that sits at the top of the hill. Rumour has it that if you even step one foot into the desolate building then you will possessed by the ghosts that call the building there home. Hannah being the curious person she is has always wanted to see what actually is in there but her mother has always stopped her. This was the perfect excuse, so Hannah made her way up the creepy drive way….
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