Thursday 14 September 2017

Rosie 100WC W8

Beyond the reef

Millie and Grayson have been best friends ever since they were born, there parents are very good friends. They always go on adventures in the ocean, they played hide and seek in the coral. There was one rule, that they weren’t to go past the reef. Millie and Grayson hated this rule, what could they be hiding. They always had conversations about how they would uncover the secret. So, what lies ahead of the reef? Well  it is and understatement to say it’s beautiful. There are thousands of pearls in clams spread across a deep canyon of sand. Secret uncovered.

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