Sunday 10 September 2017

100WC WK8 T3 Alice

Egan is a 13 year old, who is a sailor boy for the Gypsy-Rose ship. One day it was a horrendous storm and poor Egan was ordered to climb up into the crow’s nest and keep a lookout for land. “So, what lies ahead of this horrible weather?” the captain shouted over the pouring rain. “Just more rain cap’m sir” Egan answered. The rain was becoming more intense and the waves were rapidly roughing. Massive sheets of water smothered the little ship when suddenly Egan shouted, “Land ahoy!” “About time,” the captain mumbled as they arrived on a deserted island.

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