The light is one of the town's greatest treasures they say that it was given to them by the gods. But there is a terrorist group called the scissors that are threatening the town that they will blow up the light. The police have been very sceptical about every little thing happening. The light was bombed this morning and there have been emergency services rushing to the scene but because there is so much smoke we still can see what has happened. Minutes later the smoke clears people drop their knees and start to pray and tears flow down their sad faces. The light is broken!
Tuesday, 19 September 2017
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Hi Lui
ReplyDeleteThis is helping to create quite a powerful image, it feels as though you are drawing on many of the awful things that you may have heard in the news. You have made some careful word choices which enhance the mood of this piece.
Miss T
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