Wednesday, 6 September 2017
100WC W7 T3
It was stormy outside at Brean Down the power was out and we were using the backup generator whilst we were sitting in in front of the fire When we heard a massive thump! Coming from outside we looked out to see what it was. All we could make out was a massive shape of a human.We went back to the fire and wondered what it was, maybe it was a giant? My brother said Mum looked at him strangely and said “we will see tomorrow” we woke up at 8:07am and went outside and save huge footprints.
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I really liked the way you build suspense in your story and ended it on a cliff hanger. Next time remember to proofread it thoroughly. Also make sure you aren't putting random capital letters in the middle of your sentences.
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