Thursday 27 July 2017
Matthew t3 wk1
Timmy and his friend Jeff were on there way to school when all of a sudden the school bullies followed them onto the road that there school is on and dragged them behind the nearby bushes and beat them up with baseball bats .Timmy and Jeff were in tears with black eyes and broken noses.They dragged themselves 5 meters before fallen on there face on the floor eventually nearby pedestrians called the ambulance and soon found out who it was by.The school bullies went to juvenile for 5 weeks and Timmy and Jeff went straight to the hospital.
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