My friends and I were at the mall when all of a sudden we heard banging, crashing and yelling in the bank we were fascinated in what was going on. As soon as we got to the bank someone stuck a boom to the gate door and the bank teller yelled get down and we bounded to the ground I was howling out MUM, MUM I need you, but my Mum was at home. I saw the robber’s take the money there was about 4 million dollars in there but it wasn't about the money it was about people's lives.
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