I was walking along the footpath when all of
a sudden out of the blue I heard a loud scream.
I looked around there was no one around.
The sky turned black and the birds stopped chirping.
Then everything went silent. I felt a chill run
down my spine. I thought to myself what was
happening to me was this a dream? I walked
down my friends driveway. As I reached the front
door I could see blood everywhere.
The front door was open. I walked inside.
At that moment I realised this was real.
My best friend was dead.
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