Monday 4 December 2017

Corbin 100WC T4W8

Growl Growl Growl! There was some kind of animal in the bush. We went to run away from the growling but we heard some more so we stayed still and as quiet as we could. Then out of the blue the king tiger came 11 feet high and weighed around 300 kg. We were going to make a break away but the tiger was blocking our escape. We looked down to our legs and saw this cross so we started digging. We found 4 shotguns we all grabbed one and started shooting the tigers. But one more left the king.

2 comments:

  1. I really like your story line.
    Next time make sure that it all makes sense.

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  2. Hi Corbin,
    After this shooting scene I had to drink a cup of coffee to reenergize. Wow! I understood something special happened to the king tiger. Did he survive the attack?
    I really liked the way you you made your readers actually hear the Growling coming from the bush and the precision of details about the king tiger’s size.
    Thank you for sharing your adventure, Corbin.
    I'm teacher Ines, from Portugal (Team 100)

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