We are going on field trip to the local zoo today I am so exited I can’t wait till we go. I am going to bring some money so I can get a milkshake. There is a baby giraffe at the zoo and many different animals including a new fully grown tiger. We are on the bus and have arrived at the zoo I want to see the tiger. It says not to tap the glass but Jimmy is a savage and pissed of the tiger, it smashed the window and ate jimmy's head the tiger was blocking our escape…
Sunday, 3 December 2017
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I like you story line.
ReplyDeleteNext time maybe you could use appropriate language.