Ding Dong.Oh no it can’t be. The smoke smell and the sound of bells is heard. The streets lamps went out. The bell sound got louder and louder by the second. Lightning light the sky, rain fell and hail showered. In the corner of my eye i saw a big black figure with red eyes. It smiled at me with sharp teeth , blood dripping down. Its time it said with a low voice. No! No! NO! Not yet . what are you saying? Said the figure. Then in a flash of lightning i saw it’s party time said the figure.
Wednesday 31 May 2017
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Pretty scary Jordan, I was on the edge of my seat! You should probably change "i" to "I"
ReplyDelete~Benji ππ xD
Great story Jordan I really liked how you created suspense and used lots of describing words next time proof read a little better and put spaces in at the right places
ReplyDeletevery scary Jordon good work! ������ maybe change the ending a bit and make it sound better ������������������������������������������
ReplyDeletebest story ever π
ReplyDeletejordon you cannot comment like that on your own piece of writing
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