Sunday, 22 October 2017

Connor 100 WC W2 T4

My rage fizzled over. “Fine!” I yelled, storming out of the room. The door almost came off its hinges as it rocketed shut. But as the door slammed, I knew I was being a fool. I had been playing my favourite game of Monopoly and I landed straight on Benny's Park Lane property and I had to pay him a fortune.
This meant I had no money left at all and that meant he had beaten me a consecutive six times in a row. But as soon as I slammed the door I knew that I had completely overreacted. So I went back in and apologised to Benny. 
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1 comment:

  1. Katie25 October 2017 at 08:10

    Well Done. I like the way you used a lot of adjetives. Well Done

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