tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5934824168324053193.post8314905302727114827..comments2023-05-02T08:57:23.749-07:00Comments on 8GMc 100WC: Natasha 100WC T4W2nzdigiteacherhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15887854981221609757noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5934824168324053193.post-2098651851371020792017-11-01T22:24:42.000-07:002017-11-01T22:24:42.000-07:00I liked how you used the word, gallant.
Maybe try...I liked how you used the word, gallant. <br />Maybe try to add more descriptive words because the things you're writing <br />about is pretty emotional.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5934824168324053193.post-41578759037744097872017-10-31T23:00:45.222-07:002017-10-31T23:00:45.222-07:00Great story Natasha, I liked your describing words...Great story Natasha, I liked your describing words like: gallant.<br />Next time you could tell the reader that the story was set in a room with a door, and then that door slammed.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5934824168324053193.post-51945966607503860322017-10-26T21:52:01.391-07:002017-10-26T21:52:01.391-07:00I really like your story it made me stop and think...I really like your story it made me stop and think what will happen next. But maybe next time tell who the characters names are and what they did before the war. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5934824168324053193.post-83414648578719376512017-10-26T00:35:31.925-07:002017-10-26T00:35:31.925-07:00I think it was really creative to make your story ...I think it was really creative to make your story war themed, but I just got a little confused about the door slamming. Because it didn't really mention that it was set in a room.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5934824168324053193.post-37806291777778206762017-10-26T00:25:56.733-07:002017-10-26T00:25:56.733-07:00I really like your choice of a story line.
Next ti...I really like your choice of a story line.<br />Next time make sure it all makes sense.<br />Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com