tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5934824168324053193.post7768739360562055840..comments2023-05-02T08:57:23.749-07:00Comments on 8GMc 100WC: Rylee 100WC T4W4nzdigiteacherhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15887854981221609757noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5934824168324053193.post-41544789896047614452017-11-15T22:10:25.011-08:002017-11-15T22:10:25.011-08:00I really liked how you made the story about the gh...I really liked how you made the story about the ghosts experience.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5934824168324053193.post-77428591505365921022017-11-12T09:54:54.390-08:002017-11-12T09:54:54.390-08:00Hi Rylee. Thank you for taking the time to post on...Hi Rylee. Thank you for taking the time to post on the 100 Word Challenge. The effect of your writing on me was to transport me to the streets, watching the 'ghost' keep hold of the living. You wrote is well and I really liked the close ups you gave your reader which really showed the desperate situation your character was in. Your choice of language was precise and embodied the overall mood of your piece. Well done! I look forward to reading more.<br />Mrs T. Wiltshire, England (100 Word Challenge team) Mrs Thttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00862408397047160750noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5934824168324053193.post-14276538303559623442017-11-07T20:38:10.738-08:002017-11-07T20:38:10.738-08:00Good story Rylee maybe think about making sure you...Good story Rylee maybe think about making sure your sentences sound right and read through it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5934824168324053193.post-18804073298984299982017-11-07T20:20:41.156-08:002017-11-07T20:20:41.156-08:00I loved the way you described the skyscrapers!
Nex...I loved the way you described the skyscrapers!<br />Next time maybe you could proofread, and try and avoid silly mistakes like: down at me the want revenge.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5934824168324053193.post-71952434099579417572017-11-06T19:44:28.678-08:002017-11-06T19:44:28.678-08:00Nice story Rylee but maybe write what you did in t...Nice story Rylee but maybe write what you did in the past and how you become the Ghost. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5934824168324053193.post-68104103583233968862017-11-06T01:11:02.514-08:002017-11-06T01:11:02.514-08:00Hey, you have taken a really different approach wi...Hey, you have taken a really different approach with your writing that I haven't seen from the other stories so far. I think I saw a few errors in the first sentence- The glossy white skyscrapers stared down at me like they wanted revenge. I wondered if you should write in past tense right up to the final sentence- as if you are explaining your past and why you are called ghost. Either way, I like what you have done. Mollyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07002087483019945020noreply@blogger.com