tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5934824168324053193.post7460995635496296818..comments2023-05-02T08:57:23.749-07:00Comments on 8GMc 100WC: Lui 100wc T4 W7nzdigiteacherhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15887854981221609757noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5934824168324053193.post-46016939868297899792017-11-29T20:05:25.895-08:002017-11-29T20:05:25.895-08:00Nice story I liked how you described Bob's cha...Nice story I liked how you described Bob's character.<br />Next time maybe try to give the reader a rest by adding commas.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5934824168324053193.post-54111817203367750002017-11-28T21:08:44.295-08:002017-11-28T21:08:44.295-08:00Nice Work. I liked how you described your characte...Nice Work. I liked how you described your character well. About where he spends a lot of time and his childhood. At the start you wrote 'there was a black guy' that was suggests that he has gone from the narrative's life or is gone, then you wrote 'he has' which means that he is here. Just be aware of past and present tenses.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com