tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5934824168324053193.post2824345203075169612..comments2023-05-02T08:57:23.749-07:00Comments on 8GMc 100WC: 100WC WK4 T4 Alicenzdigiteacherhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15887854981221609757noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5934824168324053193.post-78648659702293344332017-11-08T22:07:58.067-08:002017-11-08T22:07:58.067-08:00Nice I liked how you use descriptive langwitch. Ma...Nice I liked how you use descriptive langwitch. Maybe try not to add as much commas.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5934824168324053193.post-25042262694369607482017-11-07T23:14:29.315-08:002017-11-07T23:14:29.315-08:00I really liked your story line and the way you lin...I really liked your story line and the way you linked ideas together. Maybe next time you could add less punctuation such as commas.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5934824168324053193.post-39155854092922821832017-11-07T20:24:56.644-08:002017-11-07T20:24:56.644-08:00Good story!
I really like how you thought outside ...Good story!<br />I really like how you thought outside of the box with your story line.<br />Next time make sure you don't have lots of commas in your sentences. Eg: The first sentence has 3 commas.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5934824168324053193.post-3353067327701632292017-11-06T00:49:20.430-08:002017-11-06T00:49:20.430-08:00Really nice story, you've used the words reall...Really nice story, you've used the words really well and have been able to come to a conclusion at the end. Have you thought about changing- nothing could be done to 'irreversible'. Sometimes as writers we use a lot of words to say something that could be said in one or two words. 'The innocent humans remained ignorant to their transformation' Next time you write, do a few drafts of your piece- give yourself time from the first time you have written it and go back. Mollyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07002087483019945020noreply@blogger.com