tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5934824168324053193.post2475873802686381000..comments2023-05-02T08:57:23.749-07:00Comments on 8GMc 100WC: Connor T4 W4 2017nzdigiteacherhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/15887854981221609757noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5934824168324053193.post-85150572140522303592017-11-08T22:44:55.217-08:002017-11-08T22:44:55.217-08:00Nice Story. I like how you used heaps of adjective...Nice Story. I like how you used heaps of adjectives to describe simple stuff. Like 'and inky night' and cobbled streets' and 'smoky look' and I also liked how to ended the story with a hooking sentence so the reader wants to read more. I think next time you could add more detail to the story as to what the object was or even give some hints. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5934824168324053193.post-37439843480229668722017-11-07T20:13:54.301-08:002017-11-07T20:13:54.301-08:00Great story Connor, really good language like inky...Great story Connor, really good language like inky night, maybe next time maybe don't leave them on such a dead ending.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com